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2.18.2013

Dim Day Paramour

She’d gone astray, but she could not stay,
on her infidelity holiday.
So she’d exhaust every thought, until there were no more.
She’d nail shut every squeaky door,
on her dim day paramour.

©Flippa Bird
(Nothing But Blue Skies, Are All I See...)
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Written For The Trifecta Writing Challenge:
http://www.trifectawritingchallenge.com/2013/02/trifecta-week-sixty-five.html

35 comments:

  1. Hmm, so if she nails shut every door on him is that... figurative? As in to keep it secret? Or is it more nefarious than that even, shutting him up permanently? Intriguing! (Also, just really cool sounds throughout). Nice job!

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    1. She nailed it shut figuratively... though I'm sure she thought about a more malicious way of ending it hehe... ;)

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    2. Also, I cant comment on your piece bc I don't have wordpress... but I really enjoyed reading it!

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  2. Great poem. This sounds like an event she regretted, which would be understandable. Glad to see you back.

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    1. Thank you! I've been crazy busy with life right now. :)

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  3. infidelity holiday - nice word combination. Short piece that says a lot.

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  4. I like the image of nailing shut the squeaky doors; I wonder if you really can exhaust that kind of thought, though...

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  5. I really liked your words in this post.

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  6. I liked this one, too! Thanks for linking up!

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  7. Oh I like this a lot (: Great little piece!

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  8. It feels like an escape gone wrong. Nicely written. (RogRites)

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    1. Thank you so much :) I enjoyed writing it

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  9. I like the idea of an 'infidelity holiday'. Flowed nicely.

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    1. I dont know that thats a very likeable idea to most haha ;)

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  10. More doors! We need to form a sub-genre. Nice piece, Flippa, and nice to see you back.

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    1. Thanks Kymm! I'm glad to be back. Been very busy. :)

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  11. This was very pretty and sweetly sad. Nice work!

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  12. nicely compact with a real punch!

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    1. I was trying to hit 33 words exactly. Thanks! :)

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  13. Infidelity holiday and dim day paramour - great pairing. Communicated quite a bit in very few words.

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    1. Thank you! I really have to be in the right frame of mind to write even one word, but when it comes I think I do ok. :)

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  15. Ahhhh! The secret kept by nailing shut the door...hopefully. So sad in a lot of ways. Therefore, nicely done.

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  16. Yes,seen that way infidelity is definitely a holiday where you cannot stay & better to nail them shut than risk going there again:-)What a cool piece of writing Flippa-loved it:-)

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